In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the Internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?
It is true that the rising prevalence of the Internet has radically changed people’s lives, allowing us to socialize and work in the absence of real interaction. While not disavowing this tendency’s implication for social betterment, I opine that its drawbacks should not be overlooked.
On the one hand, a number of advantages brought about by wireless connection have been widely acknowledged. In terms of business, advances in Internet technology contribute to the emergence of e-commerce, in which residents can get involved in online shopping and, therefore, become less likely to squander their time wandering in shopping malls or supermarkets. Besides, this technological breakthroughs also facilitate brands reduce their overhead cost, since conducting transactions via the Internet do not require an exorbitant budget for venue and labors. Another benefit stems from communication. Specifically, cutting-edge innovations like video conferencing or video call services have offered citizens opportunities to keep abreast of others’ situation despite a long distance, a demand that cannot be satisfied many years ago.
On the other hand, it seems to me that the trend towards applying the Internet to solve problems in daily life also exerts several minuses. From a security perspective, there has been a consensus that online transactions possess a lower level of authenticity, compared to traditional ones. Consequently, residents are prone to be victims of online scams or computer hackers, which may be detrimental to not only individuals but also the whole population. From a social perspective, despite its convenience, the Internet is condemned to discourage real interaction and negatively influence individuals, especially young people. In other words, due the lack of face-to-face contact, if youngsters channel too much time into utilizing broadband connections, they will suffer from a higher possibility of insufficient cognitive development, or mental health problems.
In brief, taking all its merits and demerits into consideration, I believe that shopping, working and communicating through the Internet will exert double-edged impacts on citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...exert double-edged impacts on citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, in brief, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.871875 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37062071203 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68125 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8300464162 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.538461538 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136582009534 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384176172052 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379657364686 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742220421236 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120953506697 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.06 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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