More and more city workers are deciding to live in the country and travel into work every day. The result is decreased traffic congestion and damage to the environment. What measures do you think could be taken to encourage people not to travel such long

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More and more city workers are deciding to live in the country and travel into work every day. The result is decreased traffic congestion and damage to the environment. What measures do you think could be taken to encourage people not to travel such long distances into work?

Submitted by uyenminh on Mon, 08/28/2017 - 12:51

There is a fact that traffic jams and environmental problems are worsened day by day due to the increasing number of peope who work in the city but choose to live in the countryside. In my opinion, there are some steps which can definately be taken to takle the problem.

First and foremost, I believe that the change must start with the welfare of the city. More money could be spent on creating accommodation for the workers, as lack of places to live can be the main reason why they choose to live in different areas. For example, in the South of Hanoi, Vietnam, many corporations have invested in a number of residental areas which are close to their office buildings. Also, since the expense for city life can be costly, companies can give extra salaries if the employees perform well in their tasks.

At the same time, the government should have some policies to encourage companies to put their factories or open branches in the rural areas. As a result, labor will set priority in looking for a job in their local areas and a large number of cars and buses which are usually full of people travelling on the road everyday will be reduced. Additionally, since the population in urban areas is decreased, such problems as traffic congestion can be more easilly controlled.

To sum up, I believe that the combination of the mentioned solutions can solve the problem of crowded traffic and environmental issues caused by the workers go through a long way to work everyday.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...king for a job in their local areas and a large number of cars and buses which are usually full o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...y full of people travelling on the road everyday will be reduced. Additionally, since th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e workers go through a long way to work everyday.
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...go through a long way to work everyday.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, well, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1227.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73745173745 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66341550344 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583011583012 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.646248153 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.7 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21755691446 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758276454638 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583295136092 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12501984475 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028471557962 0.056905535591 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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