nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is positive or negative development.

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nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is positive or negative development.

it is true that youngsters usually admire the stars in a variety of fields including sports. Although some of sports stars seta negative example, the rest of them have an impact on young generation positively.
There are a number of reasons why sports idols are more likely to be good examplars than detrimental ones. From the individual perspective, athletes are the icon for relentless endeavours within training process. In order to become national or famous athletes, they have to undergo thousands of hours practicing and training under the stressful and intensive level. Forexample, paralympic games in which disable athletes compete with each other to bring the honours and glories for their countries, Athletes with disability need to overcome illnesses, injuries within training courses and especially defeat the inferiority to become extraodinary.
in addition, from the social perspective,sports stars also bring the moral lessons for adolescents . They do the humanitarian such as philanthropic activities and charitable donations for non profit government organizations which aim to help impoverished or deprived people. For instance, Luis Suarez who is the famous football players of bacerlona club has generated his own organization to support street children to go to school and supply the daily basis for them
in conclusion, behind the success of sports idols is the consistent effort throughout a long period. They deserve, therefore, to be the shining icon for young generation can be able to learn from them.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1296.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 236.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49152542373 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04015393005 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.669491525424 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0436673137 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.6 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135397810733 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552325980115 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457812004033 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870367616502 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526490054407 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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