One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantage of this development outweighs the disadvantages?
As the world evolves constantly, technological advancement has become an inextricable part of our lives. Hence, due to the advances in medical technology, the average of human lifespan is increasing, and this is certainly a positive trend, yet it has negative aspects. It seems to me that the merits of this development surpass the demerits.
On the positive side, rising life expectancy encompasses a multitude of benefits. First, the elderly are more likely to have the opportunity to fulfill family obligations. For instance, grandparents have more time to foster children during the absence of their parents, which deem a propitious time not only to impart their encyclopedic knowledge but also to share their considerable experience. Furthermore, by increasing life expectancy, seniors will most probably pursuit their interests because when they were younger, they had less the time to pursue their hobbies, so that they can relish their lives.
On the contrary, the drawbacks of extended longevity cannot be overlooked. One of these disadvantages is that the retirement age will be simultaneously prolonged if the average of the lifespan increases. Thus, the total of the workforce who are unemployed will expand. Moreover, they place an onerous burden on society since they need more care than usual. In addition, metropolitan cities become densely populated owing to low mortality rate.
In conclusion, whilst longer living has undoubted benefits, of which spending more time with their families is the most apparent, it has obvious disadvantages as well, most notably is overpopulated cities. Accordingly, it appears to me that the merits of this development transcend the demerits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51145038168 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08706669354 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63358778626 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.462868834 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.142857143 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124454912648 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406730997549 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412789123485 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752719205273 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348557605829 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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