One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, We are living in a modern era and best technologies can be found day by day. Our life would be going too easily with the help of these plethora of technologies. One of the major situation is improved in health care field is that due to better treatment and medicines today's human are living healthier life and increasing expectancy of life. I think that the merits outweigh the demerits.
To begin with, there are several drawbacks of longer life expectancy. The main con is that due to better medical care older people population growing rapidly and this ratio can be increaing day by day. Older people need more facility and mediacal treatment and they get more sick as days passed. So, number of nurses and doctors can be busy to improve older people situation and also goverment take care of senior citizen to helping them financially and provide pension insurance and etc. So, in the future pension insurance system would be disappear because government lost a lot of funds. Moreover, sometimes due to medicine side effects older people may get in stressed and their body cannot suppport them to doing a better work.
However, I think that the benifits outweigh the cons. New technologies and reserach make everyone's life more easier than past decades. Increading life expectancy always help in some or onther way. Older people has many advantages to the individual, their family and society. The main pro is in family we have to need older people hand on our head and they guide their family members as different situations. Firstly, the obvious benifit of this is that people can live longer life with their family and explore different destinations as family demands. Older people get a more time to spend quality time with their family . Secondly, Senior person experience gey benifit for family and society. For example, in tough situations we are always get advice form older people and their advice cannot be wrong at all in any circumstances.
Moving further, Older people give vaulable advice and emotional support to younger generation in difficult times. Another main advantages is that garndchildren spend more times with their grandfather and grandmother and they also teach valuable skills and cultural values. We can alive our culture best to give advice our younger generation. Government can also benifit from older people.They may make them more productive by increasing the retirement age or by employing them in non-labour work. Many older people are start their own business after their retirement and give some useful infromation from business.
To sum up, thanks to the enhanced medical facilities due to which we now live longer and be part of the progress. This enhanced life expectancy is a blessing for the human race. Although longer life expectancy is not without cons but i think that the upsides will justify these.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1615.20841683 148% => OK
No of words: 475.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04842105263 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58550890454 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498947368421 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0685093457 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8148148148 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5925925926 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244422403582 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714601933401 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606436696254 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152352107066 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669121371202 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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