In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous.
What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?
In the bygone days, the aim of the sportsperson is to excel in their sport and to break the earlier records while this trend has altered and now they are encouraged by the offered money perks. This essay will scrutinize the effects of these changes on the young generation as well as on the sports industry.
To embark with, changing attitude of the renowned sports personalities has a plenty of negative effects on the younger generation. It is an undeniable fact that many gamers are highly paid in these days. Thus they are living a glamorous and luxurious life. The predictions of the youngsters reveal that professional athletes are a world of parties, wealth, and hedonism. Consequently, many individuals choose a wrong path to become popular in the sports class. Meanwhile, in the past, emotions like determination and dedication were depicted by the players.
As professional sportsmen are highly paid these days it has changed the paradigm of the sports industry. A passion is missing among the players. Moreover, Sports leagues are becoming more commercialised nowadays. Also, tickets prices are ridiculuosly expensive. Furthermore, if one see the match then he can see a plethora of adverts associated with the game for their promotions. And last but not least, camera usually focus on the one sportsmen to promote him.
Hammering the last nail of this topic, it is true that sports have become an fascinating business of wealth and to earn name and fame. Although it adversely effect the present generation of youngsters still it is widely used and promoted field of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... the young generation as well as on the sports industry. To embark with, changing a...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...y gamers are highly paid in these days. Thus they are living a glamorous and luxurio...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cation were depicted by the players. As professional sportsmen are highly paid ...
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Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...days it has changed the paradigm of the sports industry. A passion is missing among th...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one sportsman', 'a sportsman', or simply 'sportsmen'?
Suggestion: one sportsman; a sportsman; sportsmen
... not least, camera usually focus on the one sportsmen to promote him. Hammering the last n...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...pic, it is true that sports have become an fascinating business of wealth and to e...
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Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effects'?
Suggestion: effects
...rn name and fame. Although it adversely effect the present generation of youngsters st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10266159696 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86485185249 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596958174905 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.79503729 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.875 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4375 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143221146551 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396166829403 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323036876774 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829385424613 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340094708268 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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