The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
In recent years, the increasing numbers of obese people, especially juveniles, has become a matter of concern as it pose threats to several countries, especially the developed. This essay will consider the driving forces behind this phenomenon and the harmful effects it may exert on families and society.
To begin, the first culprit of obesity is the massive consumption of calorie-high foods and sugary drinks, which are incredibly high in fat and sugar. As metropolitian parents are obsessed with the hustle and bustle of the modern life, their offspring are resorted to be fed with unhealthy meals. A further element catalysing to this worrying trend is the popularity of fast food advertisements, leading the youth to opt for convenient and instant food instead of home-made dishes. For instance, fast food enterprises such as Mc Donald advertise their products with misleading information, making customers believe in whatever they say and therefore, using energy-dense foods. Finally, excessive reliance on technology causes children not to engage in physical activities and burn up their calories.
As a result of this, several related problems can be anticipated. The most detrimental impact is obviously the deterioration of health. For instance, diabetes, as a consequence of obesity, leads children and adults to endure paintful medical procedures. Moreover, several obese teenagers will face the higher risk of being bullied in school, which leaves negative influences on their mental health. Even worse, overweight people tend to lead a sedentary lifestyle and become incapable workforce, slowing down the economic development.
In conclusion, it is evident that the lack of guidance, unsuitable advertisements and technology reliance are the key factor to this pressing issues and that obesity has harmful impacts on each individuals and the whole country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58041958042 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99596285647 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646853146853 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5956189639 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.769230769 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105406568282 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330197988313 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313972387675 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595489108924 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326969075261 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.91 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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