At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Over the past few years, the phenomenon of the increasing youth population accounted for the highest proportion compared with the greying group. Though this prevailing phenomenon would reap an array of benefits, I believe that its downsides need taking into consideration.
On the one hand, there are a few advantages why many hold a belief that younger population could bring a variety of beneficial ramifications in human’s life. The first advantage of this trend is that the younger population have a robust state of health compared with the greying population. In fact, by availing this effective merit, the rate of diseases in the youth population would be mitigated, which makes a great contribution to curbing the enormous pressure on welfare state when the budget is stretched thin for any governments. Thanks to this trend, the fiscal resources of a nation can be allocated properly on other aspects such as education, goods production and among others. Another fact is that the development of being creative of younger population could bring the beneficial influence of the economy. To be more specific, to facilitate human-living conditions, the producers are likely to enhance the productivity to satisfy the consumer’s demand, and thus the younger population could offer creative and measure effective not only to lift the producers out of this problem but also reinforce the economy of a country.
On the contrary, despite these attractions, its detrimental effects are perpetually a crippling problem for the resident’s life. First and Foremost, an increasing number of people who look for stable and well-paid occupations, which is a large drawback of this trend due to the excessive competition between them is the main culprit of leading the high unemployment figure. Consequently, this problem may pose a danger to society since the unemployed may turn on the crime of passion. Furthermore, being devoid of work experiences seem to be other downsides in the youth population. As a result, the youth population could throw their enterprises in disarray because from their minute mistakes to being enormous, which leads a plethora of burdens to not only their business but also the economic stride of a nation.
In conclusion, as cited above, while this phenomenon could offer a multitude of merits, I concur with the idea of its downsides bring numerous adverse corollaries in human’s life
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3038961039 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99325829323 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550649350649 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.0375544591 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.857142857 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127970198679 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449915318476 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403041608151 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722333717329 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196157352763 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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