At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently, the distribution of population by age has rapidly changed with the young comparatively outnumbers the elderly. Although this trend may cause harm to society in some aspects, its benefits in the long run should not be undervalued.. \

There are number of reasons why large number of the young acts as an incentive for the economy to develop. First, since the young is more active and innovation, the young employees seem to easier keep up with technology than the older labourers. For example, some occupation that is related to machine in assembly line appears as challenges for the older people as it is hard for them to take advantage of technology. Second, people often lose the flexibility in working which the young already has. For instance, some sort of work required working under pressure or even overtime such as nurses, flight attendants often seeks for the young workers.

Moreover, larger number of young adults can reduce the burden for whole society. In term of taxation, more young people will result in more employed workers and more taxes for government. These taxes may later make up for the public subsidy. Finally, young people can be the care-takers for the older one in the whole society.In reality, if a country is populated with higher number of old-aged citizens, there seems to be the situation in which the older has to confront with homelessness and hunger.

In conclusion, the outstanding number of young generations would efficiently force the economic development of countries. Besides, some social burdens including taxation and healthcare services can be minimized thanks to the contribution of young labourers.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 24.0651302605 25% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23134328358 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77893411469 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597014925373 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6441005746 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.846153846 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259336945053 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901501977852 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597612515671 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150290955624 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018798919239 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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