Shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In modern societies, the consumption of processed food and soft drinks, which can exert detrimental impacts on human health, is rising rapidly. The question of whether these types of products should be banned from the market or not still remains controversial. Personally, I am firmly of the latter point of view.
To begin with, it is claimed that the prohibition of the sale of health-harming products can have negative effects on not only the business but also the national economy. The extinction of these food and drinks is believed to result in a huge decline in the manufacturers’ profit. Consequently, unemployment is more likely to happen. For example, fried chicken, which is listed among the most popular dishes in various fast food restaurants, can be diminished, causing considerable financial damage to the companies.
In addition, it is undeniable that the remaining demand for these products can act as a catalyst for the illicit sales, which leads to higher rate of crime. To illustrate, an alcohol-addicted person can search for many available means to get access to this product without any awareness of its legality.
Opponents of the above idea may claim that disappearance of this type of foodstaff can be a contributing factor to the decrease of several illnesses, including heart attack and obesity. This can be true to some extent. However, it is considered to be more effective for the government to launch campaigns to gain public knowledge about the affects of unhealthy eating and how to form a nutritious diet.
To summerise, a strict ban of harmful food and drinks can do more harm than good. It is, therefore, recommended that more action should be taken to raise awareness of the citizens about the importance of practising healthy eating.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, may, so, still, therefore, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14432989691 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03587972415 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615120274914 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7299774516 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.928571429 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195010280057 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644420440099 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414659463473 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105490405276 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300054710642 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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