In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
It is true that the average weight of people is increasing while their status of health and fitness is decreasing. I believe there is at least one important factor to account for this trend and several measures should be considered as solutions.
The reasons for this trend can be found in their lifestyle mainly. First of all, fast food should be blamed the most since their target audience is mainly children, who would wheedle parents to get what they want. Fast-paced life leaves hectic people with no tie to prepare healthy diets and they often choose junk food which absolutely leads to obesity. Secondly, computer games and televisions are accounted for as a crucial factor. Watching television as couch potatoes, as well as playing computer games for hours and hours, will lead to a sedentary life and soon be detrimental to health. Lastly, I blame the stressful life of a fast-paced modern society which results in uncontrollably putting on weight.
Several measures should be taken to address this negative change. First of all, people should take regular exercise. Without exercise, people will soon be prone to obesity. National and local authorities should ban or reduce the amount of junk food sold in the area, together with people adopt healthy diets which are low in fat and high in fiber to improve health status. Finally, schools as well as workplaces should hold campaigns that provide information about a healthy lifestyle. These will absolutely help decrease putting on weight as well as raising levels of health and fitness for all kinds of people. Medical university in my local city, for instance, held a health campaign for a better lifestyle which was very successful last summer.
In conclusion, while many reasons are pointed out for the increasing trend of average weight, several measures can be taken into account to increase health and fitness status.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to junk'
Suggestion: to junk
...are healthy diets and they often choose junk food which absolutely leads to obesity....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09003215434 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53666163435 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565916398714 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4468417553 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9375 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225671931102 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779961095447 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755386806271 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164545734132 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499763714627 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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