In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is a conspicuous phenomenon of the growing over-weighty population in particular countries. The reason causing the increasing average weight and decreasing level of health and fitness can be concluded to the food and living behavior of modern society.
It can be observed that the obesity problems usually occur in the well-developed countries. Citizens of these countries are supplied food from a variety of resources. They are able to have beef, lamb, pork and chicken every single meal. It tends to make them get superfluous nutrition from the high protein food. Moreover, people in these countries also enjoy the delectable dishes, such as pizza, steaks, soft drink, and a plethora of snacks. These foods would become the burden for our bodies.
On the other hand, the lifestyle in cities is busy and stressful. Not only workers but also students spend a great amount of time on jobs and studying. In order to undermine the unnecessary waste of time, they would choose fast food to be their meals. Their sedentary living and irregular diet have a negative impact on the health. Furthermore, the high-pressure and laborious works make them insolent to exercise. After dinner, most of these people prefer to sit on the couch and watch television rather than do the other exhausted works.
To prevent the severe obesity problems, the government should promulgate the importance of health and fitness. It is possible to add the course of healthy diets in the school. By the basic education, it would turn into the subconscious to affect people choosing the truly nutritious food. The individual could enforce themselves to do exercise by some special ways. Perhaps they can walk to home or use floor but elevators; or they can save some time every night to do the stretching. Without the tired and sweaty sports, these simple exercise could lead the body healthier.
In conclusion, the food we eat and the lifestyle we live would effect we are healthy or not. To prevent the possible risk for our bodies, just try to have the real food and do the little workout.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...essary waste of time, they would choose fast food to be their meals. Their sedentary...
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Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... we eat and the lifestyle we live would effect we are healthy or not. To prevent the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in particular, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99711815562 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65399874854 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585014409222 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.7116009829 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.8181818182 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19322415988 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473534296366 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498206962805 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10574710523 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578652746336 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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