In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.To what extend do you agree or disagree wi

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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Nowadays, for many people who are too busy of working, fast food becomes an important part of their life. However, more and more people are grieving from sicknesses as a consequence of overeating fast food. Some people think that it is essential for government to enforce a higher tax on this kind of food. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this idea.

Some people may concern that by dint of this policy, many small companies or stores, which mainly sell fast food, have to face with a threat of bankruptcy because of higher producing cost. Ironically, only when the government applies this policy, could we reduce the quantity of fast food. For instance, thanks to higher tax on this type of food, many companies will turn their strategy to manufacture other kinds of food, which are healthier. Moreover, the consumer will have a lesser choices of fast food and it leads to the deterioration of fast food in their meals.

On the other hand, it is undeniable that the high tax will impulse the price of fast food. As a result, the consumer will have to suffer this higher price. Nevertheless, only until they have to pay for fast food at a high price, do they stop to buy it. Therefore, they will prefer to prepare food themselves instead of eating fast food. For example, every morning, my mother always design a box, which contains full of rice, meat, vegetable,... for my father's meal at work. On the other hand, by virtue of the higher tax on fast food, the government will have a greater fund to allocate to the health care treatments for victims of fast food.

In conclusion, although taxation policy is always a good approach, the governments need to integrate it with other methods such as education, communication,... to achieve the best result.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

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...methods such as education, communication,... to achieve the best result.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75895765472 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61411153858 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521172638436 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9126796008 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9411764706 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52941176471 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368902141586 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130822886601 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781937802002 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219516181791 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109583388767 0.056905535591 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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