In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies.Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

Essay topics:

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies.
Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

There is a dispute of whether adolescents go to work or travel for a year before they entering the further studies. The advantage and disadvantage in my option are the following.

The idea of work or travel before universities gives the opportunity to observe the pragmatical world. Some people believe that when students finishing their high school could work or travel for a while for the reason of establishing their goals. In Taiwan, for instance, students are required to study for the compulsory education. Most of them even do not know the main idea of studying. The experience of work or travel would provide them a chance to make sure if they are necessary to study further. On the other hand, this is also beneficial for recognizing the major students want to take in the future since the curriculums in universities are more consistent and professional. The decision of majoring could be a pivot to influence the career.

Other people, however, consider that working or traveling in the early age is inappropriate. They are worry about the negative effect on the students. The society has a variety of attraction which could distract their attention from jobs. It is often to hear the news about teenagers who lost themselves when they meet the “adult friends”. In addition, the education of previous studies is basic and theoretical. Young people are therefore hardly to operate in their work. It is easy to anticipate that these novices would be arranged to serve the tea and collect the newspapers.

In conclusion, there are several comments about students should or should not go to work or travel between finishing high school and starting university studies. I believe that there are both advantage and disadvantage, and we should think twice before making any decision.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: I_AM_WORRY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worried'?
Suggestion: worried
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08417508418 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87238739523 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552188552189 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8836248683 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8888888889 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342774712186 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832037051374 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863419775823 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183646366114 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595963785381 0.056905535591 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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