In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Undoubtedly,exploring new things broadens the horizon and it is a common practice in some countries that they encourage their students who have completed their high school to take a year break for traveling or work before they register for higher education in universities.Some people second this,where as other feel totally opposite .

It can be debated that taking a year long gap after higher studies may lead to loss of interest in studies as the individual stay out of the academics . Moreover,most the people work in order to earn money so that they can support their inheritance.Therefore,if they start working earlier before finishing their university education then it is very difficult for them to pursue their careers .For instance,in many developing countries people work at an early age in order to meet their daily needs because they are the only support of their families .On the other hand ,travelling and working influence their choices and as a result of that they can be easily deviated from their goals which they initially intended to get into

Nevertheless, Some People point out the benefits and positive changes which are brought by experience and exposure of certain places.As they visits new locations they not only get a chance to meet new People but it also help them to understand their cultural differences more clearly. Additionally,working under different circumstances teach them various skills which can be beneficial in securing a good job. For example ,most organisations require multi skilled and knowledgeable person in order to enhance their productivity through a better approach.

To sum up, After having a fair discussion on both sides of the argument ,I believe that exploring the world and working under different environments brings out the polished Individual who is capable of taking expert decisions of the life a head .

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28428093645 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22672222656 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 49.0 20.2975951904 241% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 257.415628033 49.4020404114 521% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 263.333333333 106.682146367 247% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.8333333333 20.7667163134 240% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 23.5 7.06120827912 333% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214166309956 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926085036231 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087728512932 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136482283181 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798132173695 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.4 13.0946893788 217% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 11.3001002004 198% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.1190380762 213% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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