In some country, young people leave rural area to live and work in cities. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?
Along with the non-stop development of the world, the young have tendency to leave the countryside and find out the new fortunes in cosmopolitan cities. There are many reasons leading to this trend such as better quality of life in cities. In addition, living and working in cities also causes both negative and positive results, however, i believe its disadvantage overpasses its advantages.
To begin with, the reasons why young people make a decision to move out of rural areas to settle in cities vary. Firstly, it is undeniable that the quality of life in countryside is inferior to that in cities with series of shops, restaurants and modern infrastructure. People have a burning desire to possess such a glamourous life with the state-of-the-art technology, therefore, cities are the attractive destination for them, especially high-oriented ones. Secondly, the young are imbued with the idea that it is city – a promising land where they can find out their fortune and develop their career. Admittedly, there are thousands of companies basing their office in cities, which create favourable conditions for them to get a good job.
However, the transition might be conducive to more drawbacks than benefits on society. Without knowledge and skills, hardly the young can compete in labor market, hence, they are reluctant to opt for life of criminals, which might be the breeding ground for social unrest and political instability. Another detrimental result is that authorities in urban areas will struggle with the high pressure from medicine, education and other life-sustaining matters in order to meet the increasing city population. These problems would lead to financial constraints. Nevertheless, society will become more economically balanced with more even distribution of wealth between rural areas and cities. This will also stop any animosity stirred uo by difference in status between countryside people and their city counterparts.
In condition, because of many reasons, young people tend to move from rural areas to urban ones. However, this trend results in several serious problems especially social unrest and the increasing rate of crimes in cities. I think government should have equitable policies to encourage people develop business in countryside.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33977900552 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82714394673 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560773480663 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1125530932 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.705882353 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => More facts,knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227658081929 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691018512245 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507959712409 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147647753583 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423077815114 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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