Some may believe that more academic subjects, such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued students ought to be taught with more compulsory subjects, such as mathematics and science while others think subjects that are more practical, such as cooking and motor mechanics should be given more priorities. It is agreed that educational institutions should prefer to teach more functional subjects to compulsory subjects. This essay will first discuss the increase chances of top jobs after studying academic subjects and then discuss of being hired easily when chosen practical courses, before coming to a reasoned conclusion.
There is ample evidence to suggest that academic subjects secure high paid jobs because the demand for these subjects continues to rise. In other words, when people persuade their career in these basic subjects, the chance of working in top companies increases and they can be renowned as well. For instance, a 2014 study conducted by Cambridge University found that almost 80% graduated students in basic subjects are immediately given employment in prestigious offices. Therefore, it is clear that academic subjects should continue to be focused, as its future is very rewarding.
However, it must not be forgotten about the increasing demand for practical subjects in today’s world as the world has transformed totally. This means that people having practical skills are gaining more opportunity to find jobs easily with fewer obstacles, compared to highly-skilled jobs. For example, a survey done by the UK government showed that the vacancy of chefs is the highest, with the increasing number of restaurants in the UK. Thus, it is evident that people with practical skills can land on jobs quickly, tempting people to study these subjects.
In conclusion, practical subjects should be given more preference in schools, while many feel that teachers should still concentrate on teaching basic courses. Although compulsory subjects can secure top-positioned jobs, I believe the school should give more priority to optional subjects as it provides the easy finding of employment in this competitive world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
...given more preference in schools, while many feel that teachers should still concentrate ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236467236467 0.247107548796 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.188034188034 0.15552993741 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.122507122507 0.0946569551029 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.02849002849 0.0437536398559 65% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136752136752 0.122223957237 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0740740740741 0.0403219363162 184% => Too many participles.
Conjunctions: 2.78278574173 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031339031339 0.0326786765898 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0598290598291 0.0861751148067 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.034188034188 0.0214082191602 160% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00854700854701 0.0119246538136 72% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2066.0 1933.38276553 107% => OK
No of words: 320.0 316.052104208 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.43613707165 6.10592293882 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20519365927 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4375 0.37474360046 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.321875 0.284197041944 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.28125 0.203843217982 138% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.153125 0.137313986986 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78278574173 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.560935902166 100% => OK
Word variations: 60.66884358 60.7401812628 100% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0911823647 81% => OK
Sentence length: 24.6153846154 20.7725350517 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.796449523 49.5273876611 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6546546547 93.4120437189 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4924924925 15.2821509519 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.546546546547 0.594174754866 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01102204409 20% => OK
Readability: 56.8028846154 49.1922392462 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.68817204301 1.69127372897 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.371986194559 0.332604825255 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0856874591691 0.102734651613 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0588607337634 0.0668474354756 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555695996793 0.534917948617 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0902006457344 0.148666948902 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156426744413 0.13441755203 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115207306757 0.0742828286743 155% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.323646171427 0.324241079732 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0210374499702 0.0640056729886 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265707308017 0.22793763319 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117476601319 0.0582452615562 202% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41883767535 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.88977955912 153% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.60220440882 38% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.00200400802 150% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.493987976 124% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9