There are some people who think that an additional after- class studies may be more beneficial for children at schools, while others, in contrast, deem that spending time on playing games can be more right for children. In my view, children shall use the spare time on leisure activities, and the reasons for this cause will be given below.
Firstly, staying at school after when main classes is over, can bring too much stress for a child, and make him/her completely reluctant to do home task when he/she back to home. Since child’s mind is in developing stage of becoming adult in the future, therefore over excessive brain activities may cause cognitive dissonance such as lack of concentration, sleepiness, problems with memory and so on. Thus, to not this happen, it is recommended for parents to let their children enjoy gaming rather stay for extra classes.
For a second reason, it can be said that among all leisure activities have the ones which may not only entertain kids but also can make them be smarter. Chess, for example, is a good choice when kids can develop their logical, strategic, and other abilities while they enjoying the game process. Indeed, if it will be clear that a kid have an interest to playing chess, then the child may show good grades in science subjects such as mathematics, chemistry and so on.
To conclude, an extra classes at schools surely may expose risk for children of being too overwhelmed by lessons, and may cause some mental problems for them in the future. Meanwhile, despite that two third of parents probably think that playing games is a wastage of time for young children, nevertheless there is nothing to stops them to make the right choice of game, and help their children find the right balance between studying and playing various games.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247093023256 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.145348837209 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0843023255814 0.0946595960268 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0610465116279 0.0501214627716 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.031976744186 0.0437548338989 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145348837209 0.122226691241 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0406976744186 0.0403226058552 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46570976769 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0232558139535 0.0326793684256 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0668604651163 0.0861772015684 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0406976744186 0.021408717616 190% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0145348837209 0.011925033212 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1813.0 1933.35771543 94% => OK
No of words: 308.0 316.048096192 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88636363636 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321428571429 0.374742101984 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256493506494 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.162337662338 0.203846283523 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0909090909091 0.137316102897 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46570976769 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.037074148 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600649350649 0.56093040696 107% => OK
Word variations: 67.2371760304 60.7387585426 111% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0891783567 62% => OK
Sentence length: 30.8 20.7743622355 148% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6730697708 49.517814964 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.3 127.492653851 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 20.7743622355 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 0.814263465372 221% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 56.4493506494 49.1944974215 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.81707317073 1.69124875643 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221017486704 0.332605444948 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0937920247368 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0496976305583 0.0668466124924 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.610954354458 0.534860350844 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107814701535 0.148594505496 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986454644647 0.134430193775 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717020207051 0.0742795772207 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.200402464006 0.324371583561 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0260659164919 0.0638462369009 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15422083925 0.228012699653 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630533846629 0.058150111329 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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