Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people argue that law-breaking is a concequence of social issues and poverty, whereas the opposite views believe that root cause of crime is bad innate characteristics of people. I support the view that social issues and poverty cycle create criminal offenses.
On the one hand, some people with bad characteristics tend to violate the law. Firstly, cruel people seem to have violent behaviours easily than calm ones. For instant, if children bullied their classmates at schools, they would turn to gangsters later in their lives. Secondly, people are greedy or lazy might want to have easy money instead of work hard earning it. As a result, they could attend in drug dealing or human trafficking.
On the other hand, I would argue that social problems and less propesrous are responsible for law breaker rate. One reason is that, If people have no capital they will become robbers to survive and support their families. In Ho Chi Minh for instant, robbery rate is increasingly at a alarming rate because of the economy crisis. Furthermore, If people who lacked of education they would not meet the high qualifications which most of employers expect these days. Without jobs they cannot make ends meet and might consider shoplifting to have nessesities.
In conclusion, althought there are a large crime rate related to inborn characteristics of offenders, I believe that most of law-breakers are consequent of social impacts and poverty cycle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employers') or simply say ''most employers''.
Suggestion: most of the employers; most employers
... not meet the high qualifications which most of employers expect these days. Without jobs they ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1225.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 237.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16877637131 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82181651352 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628691983122 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5945318772 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2307692308 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184973784119 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607674699261 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644788002 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118220260769 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648594534458 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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