Some people believe that government should increase the number of sports facilities to improve public health while other believe this has little effect and we need other measures to improve it Discuss and give your opinion

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Some people believe that government should increase the number of sports facilities to improve public health, while other believe this has little effect and we need other measures to improve it. Discuss and give your opinion?

Some people hold a view that the construction of more fitness centers will improve the well-being of general public, while others believe that this is not an effective approach. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the number of sport centres should be increased by the authority. The first reason is due to the lack of sports facilities that hinders people from taking physical exercise on a daily basis. Therefore, a rise in the number of fitness centres can meet the demand for sport activities of people of all ages as they can train in a nearby center. Moreover, since these places are fully equipped with modern facilities and machines, this will create a favourable condition for gym goers to train in a more efficient way. They could also invite friends or relatives to join gym activities with them, which build up the habit of taking regular exercise.
On the other hand, I believe that this measure has little impact on enhancing people’s health. It is a fact that only a minority of people utilize facilities at sports centres to keep fit, which means the vast majority of people do not benefit from this programme. Furthermore, modern diseases are triggered by various factors, such as eating unhealthy food and neglecting regular checkups. Hence, it is recommended that governments and health authorities put health education among the masses high on their agenda and raise public awareness on health issues. This can be accomplished by delivering information on how to lead a healthy lifestyle to every household, and putting stringent regulations on the fast food industry.
In conclusion, I believe that there is no need to increase the number of sports facilities in order to improve people’s health conditions. There are numerous better measures to help some people to establish an active lifestyle.

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Average: 9.1 (6 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... centers will improve the well-being of general public, while others believe that this is not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07348242812 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74140023348 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594249201278 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1835565721 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.428571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388671833845 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121533585331 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111854363177 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238089809364 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086564607272 0.056905535591 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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