Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
People have sparked an argument over the impact of sportspersons on the youth. While their proponents highlight their pivotal role as idols for juveniles, I believe that athletes’ images can be noxious regardless of whether they are competing or not.
On the one hand, sportsmen have been recognised as an ideal public figure because of several reasons. Firstly, it is obvious that no athlete can succeed without dedication and enthusiasm in training. In other words, once their efforts yield triumph, their success stories can epitomise the significance of resilience, diligence and passion, which can be underlined to educate the youth about a whole array of positive traits. Secondly, over the past few decades, the sedentary lifestyle has been witnessed to inflict nations upon many dangerous diseases, like diabetes or hypertension. Therefore, if adolescents idolise a certain sportperson, they may tend to imitate his or her daily routine by setting up their own fitness regimes, so the subsequent workouts can gradually stave off their health risks.
On the other hand, I opine that looking up to sports professions, young adults can be confronted with a number of detriments. To begin with, while sports are currently plagued with conspiracies of using performance-enhancing drugs or match-fixing, the information related to such corruptions has been dissemminated more rapidly than ever due to the digital revolution. Consequently, in case a juvenile is a sports enthusiasm, an exposure to these incidents will be inevitable, which can be accompanied by a distorted view and an undermined trust on moral values, such as fidelity. Additionally, how athletes behave off the field also enormously impact the public. Indeed, any controversial detail about their personal life, from an extravagant lifestyle, a scandalous affair, or an adamant opinion on social issues, can be adopted by the youth, who often favour emulating their role models, and poses threats to social fabrics.
In conclusion, although the youth can absorb the zest for physical activities from athletes, it seems to me such professions’ improper behaviours, if detected, can do more harms than goods to their development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... harms than goods to their development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47076023392 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15385950762 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663742690058 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6441060569 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.923076923 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193670780273 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665390197264 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443176545559 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123319714956 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503304607281 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.6 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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