Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?
In the 21st century, the inventions of science and technology like television, social media and video games have a great impact on the intellectual and society’s development. Some people contend that the electronic media and the violence in games have no negative on the individual behavior; On the contrary I disagree with this contention, because these things have detrimental effects on the society’s behavior.
To begin with, the television shows, people are watching in these days like Reality shows and wrestling, children are more fond of these shows can be easily influenced; try to imitate them which could result in severe injury. Also the computer game which involve fighting and killing opponents, this could lead to influence on the behavior of young ones in their later life, they could commit crimes, these things can increase the problem for government.
The solution to this problem is to divert the attention of the children from these shows and video games to healthy activities. Parents should encourage them to play sports like cricket and football with their friends. Parents should prevent them from watching such programs and playing video games which could have negative impact on their personality. Moreover, government should provide adequate sports facilities like building more sports ground, so in this way the society will be free from negative trends like prostitution and drug abuse.
From my personal perspective it’s a parent as well as government responsibility, the development of a child behavior by providing sports facilities. Government should make laws for the television shows which are no appropriate for the society and children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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Suggestion:
...propriate for the society and children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4752851711 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83099701301 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555133079848 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.980486463 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189895889732 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075965265041 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795851929848 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121719856489 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841366502692 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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