Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?
It is true that there has been a rising popularity in the trend towards postponing higher education for working or traveling. While not disavowing the benefits it brings about, I believe that this tendency also create several drawbacks.
On the one hand, taking a gap year has been proved to be of great significance for both individuals and the society thanks to a number of advantages. Indeed, traveling or working facilitates young adults broaden their horizons, as well as see the big picture of their lives. In addition, this also provides them with opportunities to sharpen up their soft skills, or even discover their new capabilities. Hence, it is safe to say that this tendency acts as a catalyst to youngsters to have a good grasp of their competence as well as the labor market and therefore, make the most of their college life to prepare for their careers. Another benefit can be reaped by the society. Specifically, no sooner do youngsters get involved in voluntary programs, or work as correspondents for non-government organization, than they shoulder the responsibility of assisting social equality and domestic prosperity.
On the other hand, it seems to me that spending a short time traveling and working before pursuing higher education exerts several negative impacts on residents. From an economic perspective, if youngsters apply for a job before getting a tertiary degree, it may be an unwise decision because of an inadequate financial outcome. Indeed, the knowledge they acquired in high school is jus fundamental concepts rather than academic lessons, which makes them qualified for only clerical works and cannot assure a decent income. From an education perspective, it is obvious that taking a gap year will interrupt young adults’ transmission of knowledge. This has been scientifically proved to be detrimental to their knowledge assimilation and, consequently, makes them likely to fall behind with their studies.
In brief, I opine that although the advantages of working and traveling instead of pursuing tertiary degrees right after high school graduation are undeniable, its negative influences should not be overlooked.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in brief, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35964912281 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07710857384 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602339181287 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6514235177 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.928571429 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57142857143 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132627428268 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416920535824 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402985143134 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753263663429 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161362564961 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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