Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
It is argued that people who work in the entertainment industry are being overpaid. The essay discusses the reason why I agree that entertainers are paid too much and then I will describe other professions that I believe should receive higher saleries.
The main reason I believe saleries paid to artists are too high is that their relative contributions to society do not match their income. To be specific, I subcribe to the belief that deciding how much to pay people is contingent upon the values and meaningful contributions that their roles generate to other people. With that logic, it is considered paradoxical if high-profile figures such as singers or footballers who only entertain viewers on mainstream media, while did little to solve ongoing social issues, are ridiculously highly paid ; in contrast to other jobs in other fields such as science or education that remarkably contribute to the public good, but suffered serious pay gap.
There are other occupations that deserve higher pay cheques. The first one is scientists since those people offer solutions to pressing social concerns such as climate change, global pandemic or food security. For that reason, they should get paid in accordance with their immeasurable values to protecting human beings. Another type of occupation that should be more financially rewarded is teachers, who educate future generations with necessary knowledge to join the nation’s workforce. Surely, people who are assigned to such an intellectually demanding and arduous job should be paid accordingly.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that entertainers are being overpaid as they can not create impactful values to the society as much as other people who work in other industries. Besides, I argue that some jobs including scientists or teachers who meaningfully contribute to humankind should be highly paid. Therefore, I recommend that more measures be taken to bridge such pay disparity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ankind should be highly paid. Therefore, I recommend that more measures be taken ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37133550489 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93749719643 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57328990228 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.7309157322 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.846153846 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322300036791 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11618506578 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572884723523 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213800555915 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021456803551 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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