Some people prefer to have temporary jobs, which means they only work a few months in a year and use the rest of the time to do what they want. What is your opinion?
It is noticeable that some people nowadays choose to work for a short time of a year rather than on a regular basis. While I agree temporary jobs may work for those who have a clear dream to pursue, for most people, full-time jobs are likely to be wiser choices.
It is true that working temporarily and pursuing dreams for the rest of time help to reach a balance between financial demands and emotional needs. One the one hand, people earn salaries from contract jobs, thus laying a financial foundation for their life later-on, without worrying about not being able to support themselves. On the other hand, working temporarily allows people to pursue their dreams and devote time for things they truly wanted, therefore feeling satisfied and content. When people are able to work for their passion without financial burdens, there are higher chances that they would be more concentrated, thus achieving greater success in their dream fields. It is not rare to find example in celebrities telling stories of them spending months washing dishes in restaurants or selling cosmetics in shopping malls to accumulate fund for their albums.
However, for the majority of people, working part-time would simply be a waste of time and money. Firstly, for some people, they don’t have a clear career path, doing what they want mostly means getting involved in leisure activities, so they might end up spending this precious time and money on games or drinks. Secondly, it is hard to build a career based on temporary jobs. For people doing temporary jobs, they are more likely to be employed by various elementary-level jobs, since there are no stable demands for contracts in one specific field. However, changing from one basic job to another would not add valuable experience and skills. Frequently being in and out of work also causes employers’ doubt towards the job seeker, therefore making the job hunting process more and more difficult in the long run.
To conclude, for people who have a strong motivation and cleared path for their dreams, they can use temporary jobs to accumulate money. But for most people who gain satisfaction from their career, it is better to be permanently employed.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05994550409 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58953946607 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555858310627 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7184061292 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.8 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4666666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249434233187 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896935202748 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686226705871 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155335832825 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538244024262 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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