some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent year, there has been a growing trend toward studying part-time among yong people. It is argued that young people under 18 years old should spend all time for studying. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view.

The first reason is that students are able to pay all their attention on studying. Without part-time job or whatever irrelatively to study, students are just responsible for studying hardly and seriously. For example, one of my friends who have a part-time job at coffee shop in the result her learning outcomes are seem to be getting worse compared with the others who study all-time. Therefore, all young people just focus on studying because of being too young to take care a lot of things at the same time.

The second reason is that young students should cultivate whole the knowledge in school because knowledge, an essential element of one's success, is normally acquired through formal education. With a stable foundation knowledge which drives students explore perspective and enhance capabilities. For instance, these students found it easily to orient toward whether or not keep leering after graduating by them. So most young people who study full-time in high shool are prone to keep going in university. It is useful to encourage students to study hard in high school to ready for studying university.

In conclusion, for the reasons I have metioned above, I strongly believe that in order to achieve the best knowledge student should study whole time until they are 18 years old.

Votes
Average: 7 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: seemed
...in the result her learning outcomes are seem to be getting worse compared with the o...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ause knowledge, an essential element of ones success, is normally acquired through f...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...udents found it easily to orient toward whether or not keep leering after graduating by them. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05118110236 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57715284441 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614173228346 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6255814706 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6923076923 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240405919465 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911759173331 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100066364362 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174579564204 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713693376293 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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