Some people say the amount of time watching TV affects children’s behavior the most while others say that what they watch matters more. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Supervising children on watching TV has always been a controversial issue. Some people argue that the amount on time is what affects behavior the most of children while other people argue that the contents are what affects children the most.
First of all, it is true that the amount of time can impact on children’s behavior. Watching television for too long can negatively affect children. This can lead children to develop a bad habit of leaving TV on all the time when they are eating or doing homework. This can hinder children from concentrating other factors that are important in their life. This, the amount spent on watching television should be strictly monitored by their caregivers.
Nevertheless, I believe it is the contents of the television that affects the children the most. It is because children often cannot tell the difference between the reality and the fantasy shown on television. The news about a kid jumping off a building or a tree thinking he has a supernatural ability to fly proves this. Also, many researches have proven that children who watched violent contents developed more violent disposition and personality than children who did not watch them. Therefore, caregiver’s supervision about what children watch is very important.
In conclusion, I believe that what children view influences the behavior of children more than how long children watch TV. However, the time spent on watching TV also has impact on their behavior so both aspects needed to be supervised by their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1297.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20883534137 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88699996433 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550200803213 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3302796803 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.6428571429 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378093278883 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137015043186 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088650811095 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262288092741 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886994712096 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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