Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
You should write at least 250 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
A growing number of people believe that computer machines exert significant positive impacts on human lives, whereas the critics of computer claim that it creates high stress in the daily activities of human beings. However, in my opinion, while I believe that computer technology has brought successfully revolutions, I agree that this type of modern technology has aroused considerable anxiety and stress in a large proportion of people.
On the one hand, we can say beyond any dilemma that these appliances often lead to addictions to public and pose serious health issues. To put it in another way, the majority of them have excessive dependence, which is even considered higher than alcohol and smoking addictions. To illustrate, pupils are usually found spending excessive time on computers owing to the countless source of entertainments and they often lack outdoor activities. As a result, there are higher possibilities of growing lazy that often result to chronic diseases such as obesity, fatty liver and even cancer.
However, I would argue that the positive influence is even higher than any negatives. It has made possible for people to work from home because of which many workers are spending happy life. To demonstrate, they can avoid travelling to a work place for long distances, which would otherwise cost huge sums of money for the petrol and diesel. Not only could they save money but also they would finish their household tasks such as assisting their family members in cleaning, washing and the rest others. So, there can be no doubt that people can benefit completely from computer technology.
Over and above that, another important impact is the online activities which have brought tremendous revolutions in our life. In other words, payments, transfer of money and shopping can be done readily even though you are having chat in the cafe, travelling in a overcrowded train and watching movies. In no time, the shopping products will be on the doorway, the money will have been received already and so on. Imagine, going to a bank carrying a bag of money to make payment and transfer, it cannot be denied that you might be attacked, robbed and even killed by the burglars and violent criminals. So there can be no doubt that it has lead the life easy, exciting and peaceful.
In conclusion, although there are drawbacks such as health problems and addictions, personally, I believe benefits in terms of healthy and convenient life outweigh any negative effects.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Too many transition phrases, like:
in my opinion,
I believe
we can say beyond any dilemma that
To put it in another way,
To illustrate,
I would argue that
To demonstrate,
In other words,
it cannot be denied that
So there can be no doubt that
All of them can be removed or keep a minimum.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2032 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.956 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.333 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... having chat in the cafe, travelling in a overcrowded train and watching movies. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, whereas, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 410.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10487804878 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68292793792 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6059436697 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.117647059 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135898153787 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413775767732 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344954902159 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653472931683 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202538296823 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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