Some people say in order to prevent illness, government should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the world being increasingly developed together with pollution, health has now been of greater concern than ever before. Some argue that to handle illness, it is pivotal to tackle pollution and have reasonable housing management. Others, however, believe there are more effective alternatives. In my view, both standpoints are valid.
It cannot be denied the fact that one of the principles of having good health is in correlation with medical approaches. The facts have shown that there has been an increasing number of casualties resulting from incorrect diagnoses. Considering this, the government should prioritize investing in modern equipment that effectively assists in diagnosing and treatment processes. Couple with this is the provision of more vaccines to activate the body’s resistance and antibodies, preventing people from being infected. Besides, upgrading facilities such as hospital rooms to meet the increasing demand of patients and employing potential personnel to uplift service quality also contribute to health advancement.
Having said that, taking pathogens into account, it is essential that rulers address environmental issues and introduce new housing development. The implication of this is that the more polluted the environment, the better condition it becomes for viruses and bacteria to boom. Thus, in an attempt to ensure citizens’ healthy living environment, contaminated rivers and other water bodies need to be treated. The polluted air is also desperate for filtering by planning more green trees. Only by doing these can the city become inhabitable. Additionally, poor housing construction with cramped apartments is also responsible for health-related issues. It is crowded areas with poor ventilation systems and suffocating rooms that lead to the outbreak of infectious diseases such as influenza and tuberculosis. For this reason, housing in urban areas should be reconstructed to be more ventilated, creating a safer environment for citizens to enjoy life to the fullest.
To encapsulate, apart from applying cutting-edge technologies in medical treatments, authorities should also consider dealing with nature’s problems and implementing appropriate housing schemes to guarantee people’s overall well-being. Once their physical health is ensured, they are more likely to contribute to the development of the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, thus, well, apart from, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84770114943 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14170097945 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632183908046 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2004544833 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.105263158 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12363557079 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348772812923 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354730583029 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0712583953852 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182626211986 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.65 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.56 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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