Some people say that parents should decide on what kind of treatment their children should receive, while others believe that this is the state’s responsibility.
Discus both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Write at least 250 words.
Some people believe that the state should be responsible on what kind of treatment children should receive. However, others feel parents are the ones to decide for their children.
To begin with, the state should decide on what type of treatment children should receive. The reason behind this is for a fact that the state is aware of all genuine medical facilities as it regulates them. Therefore, it will recommend the ones entitled to provide services accordingly with certified and accredited health care providers. For example, a child requires to be seen by a specialist, the state has a record of accredited ones hence the child receives the best medical care. It is unlikely for parents as they are not aware of all accredited facilities.
Furthermore, the state networks with other countries. There are international conferences annually like global AIDS conferences. As a result, countries share common problems encountered to seek help from others. Following this, they might come up with referral agreements to countries which are able to deal with certain medical challenges .For instance, Botswana refers some of its cancer patients for chemotherapy to South Africa as per agreement. This elucidates why the state should be liable for children’s treatment instead of parents.
In contrary, parents should decide on what kind of treatment their children should get. Alternative medicine has proven to produce results quickly than conventional medicine. For example, parents with an obese child might opt for gastric by –pass in order for their child to lose weight as fast as possible. So if it was to be decided by the state, it would refer to physical fitness instructors and dieticians which would take a while. That being out clarifies why parents should decide on the treatment their children should get. Moreover, they will satisfied that they were in-charge of their children‘s health.
In conclusion, it is worth noting that the state being in control of the treatment that children should receive is fairly clear. However, I assert that both the state and parents should take part.
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253263707572 0.247107183377 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.154046997389 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0704960835509 0.0946595960268 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0339425587467 0.0501214627716 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0469973890339 0.0437548338989 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.143603133159 0.122226691241 117% => OK
Participles: 0.023498694517 0.0403226058552 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78269491742 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0313315926893 0.0326793684256 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00522193211488 0.00163938923432 319% => OK
Determiners: 0.0809399477807 0.0861772015684 94% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0443864229765 0.021408717616 207% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0182767624021 0.011925033212 153% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2126.0 1933.35771543 110% => OK
No of words: 340.0 316.048096192 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25294117647 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397058823529 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294117647059 0.28420135186 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217647058824 0.203846283523 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144117647059 0.137316102897 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78269491742 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.037074148 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.56093040696 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.7573441566 60.7387585426 93% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0891783567 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1970662167 49.517814964 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.3 127.492653851 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7743622355 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.814263465372 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 46.4117647059 49.1944974215 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.78888888889 1.69124875643 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383529907724 0.332605444948 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.088160313462 0.102741220458 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.074164834298 0.0668466124924 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481910567539 0.534860350844 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15812712955 0.148594505496 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153921065591 0.134430193775 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122654403241 0.0742795772207 165% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.315886783517 0.324371583561 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0466072102144 0.0638462369009 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28515259162 0.228012699653 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991444103951 0.058150111329 170% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.41683366733 263% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.