Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is - educating students at universities - one of the most significant concerns of the government as it intends to eradicate the level of illiteracy among its citizens. The question is whether the government should influence university students to study what will be valuable in terms of technological progress or students should study subjects which they prefer. In my opinion, both approaches have advantages and drawbacks; nonetheless, it would be more beneficial, if an educational department let students study subjects according to students' preference.
According to historical evidence, prioritizing a certain profession, in this case, science and technical specialties, can have an adverse effect on the economy of a country. The post-Soviet countries, for instance, had a tendency to influence students to study engineering, particularly the space, in order to compete with the West; however, after the breakdown of the USSR, the majority of member of countries shifted economy, which used to be communist, into the capitalism. As a result, most of the former countries was stagnated due to the fact that there was a shortage of students who had studied economics.
On the other hand, if a ministry of education decides not to put pressure on students when they choose subjects at universities, it might risk to reduce the number of students who study science and engineering since those subjects are considered to be relatively difficult. The government, therefore, may experience a stagnation in technical progress, which is as adverse as the experience, which the USSR experienced. Thus, ideally, it would be more beneficial, if an educational ministry has an indirect influence on students to correlate the ratio of students in each profession, for example.
In conclusion, it is vital to control educational sector of a country in order to decrease the number of illiterate individuals; nevertheless, that control should be thoroughly discussed in order not to face either economic or technical stagnation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risk reducing'.
Suggestion: risk reducing
...oose subjects at universities, it might risk to reduce the number of students who study scienc...
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Line 4, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ither economic or technical stagnation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25069637883 0.247107183377 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.136490250696 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0724233983287 0.0946595960268 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.041782729805 0.0501214627716 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0278551532033 0.0437548338989 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128133704735 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.025069637883 0.0403226058552 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.30429376249 2.80594681477 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0445682451253 0.0326793684256 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.105849582173 0.0861772015684 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025069637883 0.021408717616 117% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0222841225627 0.011925033212 187% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2035.0 1933.35771543 105% => OK
No of words: 315.0 316.048096192 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.46031746032 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.419047619048 0.374742101984 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.377777777778 0.28420135186 133% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.32380952381 0.203846283523 159% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.219047619048 0.137316102897 160% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30429376249 2.80594681477 118% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.037074148 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 56.9965150023 60.7387585426 94% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0891783567 62% => OK
Sentence length: 31.5 20.7743622355 152% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.984526043 49.517814964 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 203.5 127.492653851 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.7743622355 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4 0.814263465372 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 69.2777777778 49.1944974215 141% => OK
Elegance: 1.95945945946 1.69124875643 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313127787136 0.332605444948 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128399725113 0.102741220458 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0570484125614 0.0668466124924 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.66351314024 0.534860350844 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158366477663 0.148594505496 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157508811783 0.134430193775 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074246079117 0.0742795772207 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.398941212511 0.324371583561 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0924839631307 0.0638462369009 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224939413749 0.228012699653 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369280365025 0.058150111329 64% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
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The essay is not exactly right on the topic. Read the essay topic again and think why.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9