some people think that families have the most powerful influence on a child’s development. Others think that other influences like friends, teacher and means of media have much bigger effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people believe that family holds the most vital position in children's development mentally and physically while others claim that media and friends are equally important. From my point of view, all outside factors have tremendous influence on children.
To begin with, it is undeniable that with unconditional love from parents, children will feel motivated and stimulating to reach a great success. Take Mozart' father for instance, who gave up his career without any reluctances in order to devote his whole lifetime to helping his child gain outstanding performance. in addition, no sooner are children born than the first image they receive is parents, therefore, parents set a role model for them to follow. Besides, it is parents who lay the primary foundation for children in terms of cognitive ability. Obviously, children whose parents have a good genes might inherit from both their parents exposing from appearance to flair.
However, there are several factors taking over the role of parents in comprehensive development of children. Firstly, no sooner are children taught by enthusiastic and professional teachers than they might be imparted with a reservoir of knowledge and hands-on experience. This lays the solid foundation for children to achieve success in their future career. Secondly, children, as a result of being exposed to media can follow suit. For instance, thanks to admiring heroic policeman that are performed in films, children would fulfill their ambition ad habour a dream of becoming a police to protect the social justice. Additionally, friends also have a say over to personal development of children. This is because friends create favourable conditions for children to compete as well as coordinate with their peers, which facilitate them to break their own limits and bring their best out. Facts have shown that if they are working in group with pupils being ambitious, they are likely spurred to make their dream come true.
In conclusion, whoever people appear in children's life, they leave a footprint and share a wide range of knowledge. Hence, children should cherish all valuable knowledge in order to become an useful citizen.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35446685879 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82511013041 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613832853026 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0806105076 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.294117647 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7647058824 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100463204258 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360373942336 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498329669012 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853994883054 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848218328029 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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