Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extend, do you agree or disagree?
It is agrued that government should invest more public money to encourage healthy lifestyle to prevent diseases in stead of spending it on treating illed people. Personally, I disagree with this point of view because I believe that money should be spent equally on treatment and prevention diseases.
On the one hand, it is important to invest money on preventing diseases. This is a more economical way to protect health for everyone. When people already suffer from diseases, the amount of money that costs them will be larger than the amount of money spent on prevention but it does not guarantee the best result of treatment. In addition, more people will benefit if public money is invested on encouraging healthy lifestyle. For example, if government spends money on building pulic spaces and buying sport facilities, people will have more chanes to take up exercise, which may help them avoid many obese -related diseases such as hypertension and diabetes. And this is a long term solution to have a healthy community.
On the other hand, it is alos essential to focus on treatint ill people. Being ill is a heavy burden for many patients, suffering from the economic burdent of treatment at the same time makes them miserable so that they need the support of government. Further than that, most of ill people belongs to poor working class and they do not have enough money to pay for medical costs. Supporting money for them can help them overcome the challenges of life and it is a way to show the humanity of government.
In conclusion, I believe that, both treatment and prevention diseases are equally important and need to receive public money from government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.925795053 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6413563468 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533568904594 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0378787846 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.230769231 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352787133914 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122012922829 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704183116792 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207030460384 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604514403651 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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