Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that some people argue for more expenditure on measures to prevent illness by promoting a healthy lifestyle. While it would certainly result in benefits to public health, I disagree with the idea that this should be higher priority than the treatments of those who are suffering from illness.
The prevention of illness is undoubtedly important, especially for those who are vulnerable and prone to severe diseases such as infants and senior citizens. In this case, preventing illness helps not only curb the spending on cured process, but also minimize complications which may cause bad effect on patients’ future. In addition, nowadays, sedentary lifestyle has already reached the alarm rate due to the developments of means of transportation, gadgets and gizmos. Therefore, to raise public’s awareness of health, government should impose some policies to encourage individuals to use cars less and walk or cycle instead, as well as to eat more vegetable and stay away from instant noodle and fast food.
However, I wholeheartedly believe that expenditure should allocate first to the treatment of people who are ill. Firstly, not all diseases are the result of unhealthy lifestyle choices. For example, respiratory disorders stem from poor air quality in cities, while poor sanitation and contaminated drinking water contribute to outbreaks of dysentery and cholera. Secondly, many deaths would be avoided by timely treatment if hospitals received enough subsidisation from government. Moreover, hospitals play a vital role in conducting crucial researches into life-threatening diseases such as cancer or asthma.
In conclusion, while many people claim that government should more invest in enhancing healthy lifestyle, I consider treatment must have priority in health service spending.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63272727273 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06944418475 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658181818182 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3730129 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.083333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.0 7.06120827912 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286801131039 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940595433381 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833041008848 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168716178494 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672706232459 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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