Some people think that the main factors influencing a child s development these days are things such as television friends and music Others believe that the family still remains more important Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

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Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

In the world of today, some people think that external factors should play an important roll in child growth. While some other groups believe that family influence is much more is necessary. In this essay, I examine both sides of the argument.

There is no doubt that there are lots of external factors available, which significantly impacts on a child's development. First and foremost is that the internet service is a useful source of information which trough children find solutions to every study problem. For example, Edx provides courses which is helpful for easy to the understanding actual study. In addition, a friend also has an important influence as a child they copy peers that admire and respect. This could be positive behavior but it could be also negative, such as smoking and crime.

However, it is a family that has the most important impact. Children spend the whole leisure time with every member of the family, especially in their early years. It is a fact that families also give the right direction to children whenever they have in any confusion. Children develop their confidence, discipline, morals, value, and learn the important view of their life from the family. Moreover, some restrictions prevent children to do some activities but this is beneficial for their secure and bright future.

To sum up, having considered all views above, I believe that both of argument is crucial for child development but parents should onus their responsibility and give freedom for their children.

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Average: 8.1 (10 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...play an important roll in child growth. While some other groups believe that family i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in addition, no doubt, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1274.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11646586345 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6690546718 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606425702811 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5356191996 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202475641354 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070156507116 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635583847119 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132393200916 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799271350323 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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