Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people.Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
In an era that emphasises globalisation, people can earn money easier and faster from stock markets and businesses than centuries ago, as a result, this creates more filthy rich people. Perhaps let’s start by asking two simple questions, firstly, why would someone want to become rich? Secondly, if someone becomes rich, would they then use the money to help others? In my opinion, the majority of wealthy people do not participate in charity work in any way.
First, people who think about being rich are often aiming to gain more power and influence. When we scan through the top 100 global billionaires, we can rarely see anyone who is authentically willing to join charity work, except for Bill Gates. Second, even for billionaires who help, there are conspiracy theories explaining their underlying motives. Such schools of thought believe that the majority of rich people are selfish, and those who help only do so for the recognition and promotion of their brands of self-gain in general. Ultimately, more power can be gained by helping people and can in turn influence the policies that favour themselves in the long run.
However, I also understand why some believe that the major advantage of having limitless wealth is the ability to engage in philanthropic endeavours. In fact, Bill Gates is an excellent example as he has participated in thousands of charity projects since standing down from Microsoft and founding the Melinda and Bill Gates Foundation. One specific project he has helped to fund included the invention and distribution of new toilets that recycle water for Africans living in poor areas. Unfortunately, not every billionaire does so. Many of them are not altruistic but are very selfish. You need look no further than new stories published a few years ago that highlight how their organisations took advantage of every employee, such as the case where Apple used and treated teenage workers poorly in China.
In conclusion, it is very hard for me to believe that the motivation for being extremely wealthy comes from a desire or willingness to assist the poorer members of society. Most humans are selfish in nature, and they value power, influence, economical gain and their own personal gain over moral values and justice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, except for, in conclusion, in fact, in general, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08064516129 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71022139957 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650537634409 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4922852638 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.176470588 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198097780639 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05703930889 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429189479745 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10762146655 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350041761713 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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