Some people think that music plays an important role in society Others think it is simply a form of entertainment Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think that music plays an important role in society. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Nowadays people especially youngsters are paying more attention to listening to music. Most of them choose it as they consider it is the best way to improve their mood. But others believe that the role of music is vital in our life. And in this essay i will elucidate both sides of the discussion .

On one hand melodies are the part and parcel of the mess media. So the majority of population can incline them anytime on their tv, radios or mobile phones. That's why all music are should made with note by singers. The reason behind this is that if the music does not demand to the culture of society it may damage the people's intellect and difinetly their culture. For example teenagers listen to music a lot and it may detriment their mind. This is because all of them are not available for youngsters. In my opinion the goverenment or responsibles who are broadcast and make music should be more carefull in this field. They should control the means and the beneficials of music to the people's spirit.

On the other hand the matter of people think that listening to music is a way of amusing. Since with the help of it they can relax and enjoy whenever they are tired. And they can not imagine parties,holidays without music. Since it is a habit in their culture that to organize parties with music. I agree this estimation.

Finally, from my perespective both views are well-grounded. But we should not forget that music must be available listeners age and we always should remember that sometimes people need to music in order entertaining.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, so, well, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58418129533 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1386854015 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.4210526316 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3684210526 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184545336825 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057168051258 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587007047043 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116409489508 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343100960153 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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