Some people think that older school children should learn a wide range of subjects to acquire more knowledge, while other people believe they should learn a small number of subjects in details. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
A frequent debated topic whether children at school should be provided with a large number of subjects. While many people advocate it, I would contend that focusing much more on a narrow program of practical subjects is better, as will now be discussed.
On the one hand, there are those who claim that it is necessary to have courses having many subjects. Firstly, when accessing to a comprehensive learning programme with a wide range of subjects, children have more opportunities to develop their passion for a particular field. This helps children to grow thoroughly in almost aspects of life, paying the way for society to have more musicians, writers and painters. Secondly, small students are likely too young to define their career paths for life correctly at first, so teaching them a small number of subjects may limit their options for their future jobs.
On the other hand, I side with those who support the idea that learning hands – on subjects is better. Primarily, only spending a large amount of time studying practical subjects means that huge pressure of leaning jobs- irrelevant subjects will be put aside when they take exams. In addition, students certainly will have more time to concentrate on practical subjects, so they may be equipped with in - depth knowledge of their chosen career before entering labour market. For example, many children in Vietnam develop their interests in Computer Science at their early age, which allows them to have better understanding of Information technology and act as catalyst for their good head start when applying for IT companies.
In conclusion, I hold the view that schools’ curriculum based on a few practical subjects is praised for its contribution to more jobs opportunities when students finish studying despite the advantages of an education program with a variety of subjects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ldren at school should be provided with a large number of subjects. While many people advocate it...
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Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...fe correctly at first, so teaching them a small number of subjects may limit their options for th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1821192053 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75017117516 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586092715232 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7797544456 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.272727273 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180991674943 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743477485316 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446560727013 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117838766942 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375469646505 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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