Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should make efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is recommended that the authority should put emphasis on alleviating environmental and housing obstacles to decline the incidence of ailments. While I consent to their implication with people’s health, I opine that there are also several measures to address this heated issue.
To begin with, it is acceptable when states allocate their resources to tackle environmental and housing problems in hopes of gaining public level of robustness, since they are renowned as responsible for many health problems. Regarding to acute illnesses, accommodation has been considered as a major contributing factor to a great deal of infectious diseases. Indeed, if residents’ houses cannot fulfill safe hygiene standard, they will become an ideal condition for bacteria, leading to the outbreak of an epidemic threatening people’s life, as we see when Africa suffered from Ebola plague in 2014. Regarding to chronic and degenerative illnesses, a clear correlation between them and pollutants has been elucidated. For example, harmful gases contaminated by a heavy traffic flow were scientifically proved to cause malfunctions in respiratory system, or even lung cancer.
However, I concur with the view that there are a number of feasible solutions which the government may find more urgent and effective to build up citizen’s resistance to diseases. Firstly, it is necessary to upgrade public health services. Specifically, not only will this increase the society’s accessibility to primary healthcare but also encourage residents to have a regular check-up, which efficiently helps them prevent any life-threatening condition. Another measure is prioritizing the budget on the search for a cure. Indeed, if the government pours money into projects focusing on treatment for diseases puzzling scientists, scholars are more likely to create methods to permanently eradicate them, totally allaying people’s fears of ailments rather than merely offering stopgap measures.
In brief, it seems to me that although environmental and housing problems should be focused when the government improves public health, it is also necessary to scrutinize solutions stemming from other perspectives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions stemming from other perspectives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, so, while, for example, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81846153846 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29223004941 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664615384615 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5988073973 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.461538462 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133372094035 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423110357132 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356137449036 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882771881328 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026099772176 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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