Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is debatable that whether high-achievers or diligent students with a continuous endeavor to improve their academic results should be honored. Personally, I contend with the latter due to some following reasons.
On the one hand, it is understandable that some individuals advocate that straight A students should be rewarded. Traditionally, examination is designed as an academic assessment tool in order to judge students’ knowledge in a particular field such as maths, literature or physics. Therefore, students who show the most outstanding academic results should be honored to encourage them to achieve more in the future. Additionally, rewarding top students incentives mediate achievers to strive for the best to surpass their peers, which consequently foster healthy competition academically.
On the other hand, I would argue that it is beneficial to praise students in form of improvements. The first reason is that since every student possesses different talents, it is difficult to judge their qualification merely by academic results from taking the examination. Secondly, students who are acknowledged for their improvements will inspire others to pursue their academic dream. For example, my sister excels in playing musical instruments, though she barely makes a little effort. Whereas, when it comes to maths and science subjects, regarding of how industrious she is, she finds it problematic to tackle their questions. However, she continuously tries her best for two years and counting, now she is offered a scholarship for her research in mathematics. She now becomes a textbook example for every student, especially mediate achievers.
In conclusion, it is recommended to reward mediate achievers who show their diligence in academic in lieu of high-achievers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: A student; Students
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67037037037 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28053033619 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7503816464 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.357142857 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244170973541 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878796450534 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673639542146 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160181512706 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636449760513 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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