Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Essay topics:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

It is sometimes argued that competition in children should be made but other people think that children who are taught to co-operate as well as become more useful adults. There are advantages and disadvantages for both of the above idea.
On the one hand, some people think that a sense of competition in children should be made. The first reason for this problems is that we live in competitive society, so we need to teach our children the sense of competitive in a positive way. This make our children more creative and open mind. For example, school hold a competitive about creative a fun which could make more cold on the summer. This encouraged competitively in among children's mind because everyone wants to be winner. Another reason is that competitiveness can help children improve more knowledge. For instance, a famous university just received about 250 student. So, children should be competitive by learn more and more to study in here.
On the other hand, other people believe that children who are taught co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults and i also agree with idea. Firstly, cooperate can helps children to learn from each other. Instead of competition, there will be winner and losers, we can cooperate to win together. For example, I learn good math and you learn good English, we can learn each other to learning good both Math and English. Besides, cooperate can help children to be united and close to everyone. For instance, we are in basketball team in the school, we need to cooperate to win our team.
In conclusion, both competition and cooperate bring own advantages for children. However, I think that cooperate should be encouraged more in children.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96503496503 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72074707906 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482517482517 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9784815738 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8888888889 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8888888889 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485314407416 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170613638244 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176327878729 0.0667982634062 264% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330679519345 0.151304729494 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112623078854 0.056905535591 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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