Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Essay topics:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Some people believe children should learn more about cooperation instead of competition. In this essay, I would describe the both views.

To begin with, involving children in competitions motivate them to be more creative and could struggle in any circumstances. Because the rivalry becomes more intense, people need to improve day by day. This imposes people to do the best method in their life and train their mental to be strong. Moreover, almost all of institutions and government provide scholarships and they could sign up for university or jobs easily due to their achievement as a result of competitions. For example, students who are in top ten in their school usually could join to the university without taking any tests as a merit because they have worked hard since the beginning.
On the other hand, there are two main reasons for teamwork. Firstly, the collaboration could be a tool to grow the sense of caring about each other. Basically, humans are social creatures that could not live by themselves and always need each other. For instance, when I was in the university, I was not proficient in the business course and my friend had difficulty built IT programming. Therefore we assisted each other by sharing our knowledge. Secondly, tasks’ load are not too heavy and they could be solved quickly. The workload that they carry could be reduced due to the support that they gain, so the duty would be as easy as pie and resolved faster. Additionally, that change would grow their communication skill.

All in all, I think that study individually could make children become more selfish. Consequently, I personally agree that children need to be taught to work together to help one another in a good way.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97931034483 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8132183321 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610344827586 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.786078193 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9411764706 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0588235294 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22624853061 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693934534296 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731289104135 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153392291132 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538668119971 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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