some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
What makes people successful in life has always been a controversial issue. While some argue that having financial resources and physical beauty are the decisive factors to success, I would argue that being hard-working and determined are of greater significance no matter what people do.
It cannot be denied that hard work and determination are the keys to success. In other words, people can never fulfill the tasks given unless they devote a sufficient amount of time and make great effort. This is particularly true with manual workers such as builders and factory workers. To earn a living, these people have to work round the clock and even work overtime to cater to the most basic life demands. This is also the only way for them to gain experience and get promotion. Moreover, for all professions, no matter who people are, they are required to be determined to reach the target. If they are not persistent enough, they are more likely to give up, meaning their dreams will never come true.
However, having financial health and physical beauty are of equal significance in certain situations. They help individuals guarantee stability during their career path. In some Asian countries, for instance, job-seekers can only be recruited by state-owned enterprises if they submit a required amount of money to employers. In the same way, start-up businesses will face a high risk of bankruptcy unless they are financially healthy enough to cover all the costs, including purchasing input materials and facilities, monthly payments, and maintenance expenses. Besides, physical attractiveness is also considered the top priority in employment in such entertainment and services industries as models, actors and actresses, receptionists, and flight attendants. For these people, who have close contact with customers, it is their physical beauty that contributes to their being employed, otherwise, they will stand a high risk of being jobless.
All things considered, the key to success is the combination of many factors depending on the professions people are doing. Despite this, no matter what they do, it is important that they devote themselves to work and be persistent to reach the targets.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, such as, in other words, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28977272727 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89592189749 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3914778317 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.529411765 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174285521323 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578356056321 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539388015121 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121702838135 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632823325024 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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