Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The age at which a person chooses to stop working is the retirement age, but governments impose a mandatory retirement age. Hence, a substantial proportion of people claim that this age should be increased significantly due to citizens’ life expectancy has been prolonged. However, in my dissenting opinion, I think that the retirement age should remain intact extend it because this change leads to controversial issues.
One of the obvious drawbacks when raising the retirement age is placing an onerous burden on workplaces. This is because the elderly do not have the necessary energy to perform arduous tasks for their employers, so they hinder progress toward the goals and the expectations. Consequently, they contribute to inflicting serious losses where they do their jobs. For example, at production plants, if the supervisors are above the retirement age, they are not able to observe labourers closely; therefore, either the production falls or the profit plummet.
Furthermore, not only they could be a heavy load on the workplace but also, they might be the primary cause for the unemployment among young people. To enumerate, companies suffice with their headcount, for they have an adequate number of employees including seniors, which associate with a wide range of problems such as prevailing poverty as well as inequality in the distribution of wealth. Moreover, by elevating the retirement age, older people will have less time for their family. For instance, they do not have enough time to nurture their grandchildren while their parents are at work and they are not able to impart information to them also.
In conclusion, irrespective of the longevity of large portion of people, I disagree with raising the retirement age since it has adverse impacts either on individuals or societies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... not able to impart information to them also. In conclusion, irrespective of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32525951557 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00625338523 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60553633218 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3797827975 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8333333333 7.06120827912 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21955785246 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861682178489 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530549925582 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13765577635 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636705877277 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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