Some think that people should not change their jobs while others think they should because it brings advantages for themselves company and society Discuss and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some think that people should not change their jobs while others think they should because it brings advantages for themselves, company and society. Discuss and give your opinion.

There is a huge number of people believe that they should experience different kind of jobs because it is benificial for not only to themselves but also to the company and society, while others think that staying in a long-term job is better. In my viewpoint, although both choices have its own advantages, I prefer changing jobs because of some reasons including self-improvement.
On the one hand, there are two main reasons why a large number of people want to have stable jobs. Firstly, people who stay in the same position for years can make sure that they will have financial stability and other benefits such as social insurance, job promotion,... Secondly, employers tend to hire a staff who wants to contribute hisself to their company for a long period of time. Therefore, employees having perspective of focusing on long-term jobs will make a great impression on their bosses.
On the other hand, changing jobs once in a while gives people especially the youngsters a chance to boarden their knowledge and their soft skills. As when people change their jobs, they will have opportunities to adjust new working environment, to learn various of skills in lots of different aspects, to meet new colleagues. Morever, switching jobs can make job hoppers find out what is the occupation that they are really suitable for or they are really passionate for. As a result, they will do this job voluntarily and become the best person in the aspect that they are chasing after.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better to have a job change because it gives people chances of enhancing their personal skills from experiencing new challenges. Switching occupations occasionally also brings advantages for the company and society.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0303030303 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80391539195 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56228956229 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5344802198 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375873049834 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129768527629 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842252628247 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230179548688 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762754313557 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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