Sports help to build peace in the world Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Sports help to build peace in the world. Do you agree or disagree?

Along with the global development, playing sports has become common in recent years, people not only enjoy physical sports, such as tennis, football and badminton, but also electronic-sports which just require player logical thinking. Whether or not sports help us to establish a peaceful state in worldwide has aroused people’s discussion. I completely agree with the given statement. This essay will offer some compelling reasons why sports will bring many benefits to a stable and thrive world.
To begin with, team working is one of the most crucial factors that bring sportspeople in all over the world more closely together. When national players from different countries join in a team, they have to work and compete with others. By this way, the more they know about the various culture, the more familiar they find from their teammates. As a result, people solidarity as a precursor to the strengthening of international solidarity.
Besides the aforementioned benefit, it is true that people can gain many advantages when taking up a sport, from bettering health to staying happy. Certainly, if all the residents in a country are healthy and happy, that nation will become stronger in terms of economy, society and defence. For a particular example, after playing sports, the government leaders may release stress and think in a positive way about a political issue. That means, they can find some suitable solutions for that national problem, then, peace still remains and no war happens.
In conclusion, sports with many potential benefits provided above, I believe that the government should encourage people to play sports, not just for a healthier life but also a more peaceful and prosperous society.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, still, then, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24637681159 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78255208276 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644927536232 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4665874387 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.384615385 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135195235558 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474184153848 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500411873401 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822375126056 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662288961848 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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