In general, people think that students’ living in apartments in the community is more beneficial. They support that they are able to enjoy their own life without interfere from others. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should not be thought about in a different light. I believe that living in university dormitories are more advantageous for people to bond strong connection with people in the same dormitories and relieve stress from universities.
First of all, living in the university dormitories allows people to bond strong connection with others. To be specific, as modern society is becoming competitive, people tend to compete with others in order to be succeed, which makes them to not enjoy a better quality of life. However, people staying in dormitories are able to make their strong bond with others and it would be no competition among them. While people in community are selfish in competition, they are likely to support each other whatever they face with problems, which makes people’s life happily. For example, my brother lived in his university dormitories. Every time he visited to house, he looked like happy. This was because he did not care about competition with others, like heaven, which makes him be happier and enjoy his better quality of life. Thus, this shows that it is more beneficial for students to live in university dormitories because they are able to bond strong connection with friends, which as a result make their life happier.
Moreover, it is more advantageous for students to live in university dormitories because they are able to relive their cumulative stress from outside. In other word, people living in the community tend to stay alone without the help from others. This is because people who are in the community have no shared interests with others in apartments, which allows people be selfish. Their life would be boring. However, people in university dormitories have high probability about shared interests among their group, which makes people to relieve stress and maintain health. For instance, I was envy my brother every time when I saw him. This was because I was lonely and had no opportunity to communicate and discuss with others what I want to. However, my brother had a lot of opportunities to meet with others in dormitories and enjoyed party opened every month, which made him to be healthy and control his stress from outside. As a result, it is legitimate to say that it is more advantageous for students to live in university dormitories in that they are easier to stay health and maintain stress.
To sum up, I believe that the advantageous way to chose of places to live is to live in university dormitories because in the dormitories, people are likely to bond strong connections with others and relieve stress what they have cumulated. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generations.
Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226480836237 0.247107183377 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.18118466899 0.155533422707 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0696864111498 0.0946595960268 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0400696864111 0.0501214627716 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0749128919861 0.0437548338989 171% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.146341463415 0.122226691241 120% => OK
Participles: 0.0209059233449 0.0403226058552 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79342001048 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0487804878049 0.0326793684256 149% => OK
Particles: 0.00174216027875 0.00163938923432 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.0592334494774 0.0861772015684 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0104529616725 0.021408717616 49% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0209059233449 0.011925033212 175% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3079.0 1933.35771543 159% => OK
No of words: 514.0 316.048096192 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99027237354 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.20517956788 113% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363813229572 0.374742101984 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247081712062 0.28420135186 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165369649805 0.203846283523 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122568093385 0.137316102897 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79342001048 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.037074148 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396887159533 0.56093040696 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.2149002745 60.7387585426 74% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0891783567 149% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4166666667 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3930760306 49.517814964 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.291666667 127.492653851 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.814263465372 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 46.1248378729 49.1944974215 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.32941176471 1.69124875643 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472204224963 0.332605444948 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154896626877 0.102741220458 151% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.129898087175 0.0668466124924 194% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473326046366 0.534860350844 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157038605113 0.148594505496 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191598624117 0.134430193775 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117565870331 0.0742795772207 158% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.5449434057 0.324371583561 168% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0589478862039 0.0638462369009 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392844880558 0.228012699653 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346885033126 0.058150111329 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 5.90881763527 203% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 10.4468937876 201% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.