Successeful sports pofessionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think this is unfair.
Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Give reasons and relevant examples.
Athletes whom are acknowledged get more money than professionals, which work in other professions. Well, in my opinion it is justified, Successful athletes should be given same amount of money as other professionals earn.
Firstly great deal of physical and mental hard work is required in other fields,whereas solely physical workout is necessitate In sports. Athletes only does their specific workout while other professionals sweat too much of their mental and physical effort into studies and business. For instance, i have seen a sports professional who had slight workout and practice session routines only, but he earned a lot, however doctors have hectic schedule of duties,but they get less money. Secondly other professionals are mostly literate,but great deal of illiteracy seems to be in sports professionals. Education is prioritized anywhere, so we should support the even distribution of money in professions in accordance to education, Therefore in order to quote an example i can remember my past experiences. I know one football player, he was completely illiterate, but his income was higher as much as a goldsmith,in contrast to it a doctor who was obviously literate, have a quarter of income of a foot ball player. Thirdly most successful athletes go on to different trips to resorts in overseas,while other professionals do not have time for these type of leisure activities.To quote an example regarding to this, i can say, a friend of mine, who is a great sports man now, relish different trips.while another friend of mine, who is a doctor, do not have enough time to rejoice trips and tours. On the whole, i can say, other professionals should also get same amount of money as athletes earn.
In opposition to above, athlete does strenuous workout, while other professional do not sweat too much in gym. Athlete have to be clearly fit, when they are merely unfit, they are suddenly droped from international team. So Athletes have to keen on their physical health. For example a friend of mine,who is really into gym, while another friend of mine, who is a doctor, is opposite to previous one. Secondly our athletes are involved in tours and trips as much as a cosmopolitan person, as a result they can not give maximum time to their families. On the other hand other professionals can spend their time with their families during weekends,because they go to less tours and trips. On the whole some people opinion constraints to these above two reasons.
To conclude, i have to clearly revealed all the reasons, which support that, it is highly unacceptable that, successful sports man have more earning then other professionals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09839816934 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02574797959 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494279176201 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
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Interrogative: 5.0 0.384769539078 1299% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1619609859 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.777777778 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2777777778 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9444444444 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692491613444 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466430748544 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133352854419 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035072315211 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.