There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is a traditional music of a country more important than international music?

Essay topics:

There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is a traditional music of a country more important than international music?

Nowadays, it is true that a various types of music can be found in the world. It is undeniable that music is a vital part of human life due to some reasons. Folk music of a country should be regarded with more importance than international music.
Listening to music could be beneficial to people’s spiritual health, one of which is helping people alleviate stress and anxiety. The reason is that music might lift up positive feelings when people are feeling down. Moreover, music does wonders for people’s mental health. A study indicated that students who listening to calm music for 45 minutes before going to sleep showed significant better sleep than those who did not. Additionally, music is a mechanism for humans to connect with one another. The act of singing in a group creates a connection between participants, regardless of their age.
Traditional music should be valued over the international music since it represents traditions and customs of a nation. Every country has their own culture that differentiates them from others and attracts foreign tourists. For example, in Vietnam, “Quan ho” is a kind of traditional music which symbolizes the spiritual and cultural activities of local people. It plays an important role in conventional festivals and ceremonies such as weddings or novitiation ceremonies. Although international music such as the R&B and rock …are more popular with youngsters than traditional music,it is only for entertainment. It can be catchy, innovative and exciting but it is essentially a commercial product that is marketed and sold by business people.
In conclusion, music plays a central role in people’s spirits and I believe that traditional music should be given more importance than international music.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35231316726 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1257911449 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583629893238 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.434098886 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48834773508 0.244688304435 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177677649069 0.084324248473 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150156251581 0.0667982634062 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.370374513967 0.151304729494 245% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105062570126 0.056905535591 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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