There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is true that technological breakthroughs in computer industry have radically changed people’s lives, allowing us to work and study at home on a regular basis. While I consent to its implication with social betterment, I opine that its negative ones are inevitable.
To begin with, the trend towards working and learning at home is widely recognized as beneficial because of two major reasons. Firstly, it facilitate citizens make the most of their time. Indeed, the rising accessibility of computers and the Internet act as a catalyst for launching online learning programs, or convenient business applications, which offer unlimited services. Thanks to these innovations, residents can flexibly opt for times when they feel the most productive to work or study and, therefore, obtain the highest efficiency. Furthermore, regarding to urban development, these advances in technology also make commuting to work and schools unnecessary, or even redundant, which helps ease traffic flow, especially in peaked hours. As a result, if there is a decline in number of vehicles, a huge number of heated issues can be tackle, like traffic congestion, or sound and air pollution.
However, the prevailing computer-based working and studying also leads to many challenges. From health perspective, no sooner will citizens apply a computer to their works and studies at home than they spend long hours sticking their eyes on its screen and accidentally acquire a sedentary lifestyle. Consequently, users are more likely to face a number of health problems, such as obesity, refractive errors or metabolism disorders. From educational perspective, it is also foreseen that self-study at home through the computer is detrimental to students’ comprehensive development, especially for ones who are in their formative years. Specifically, due to its lack of real interactions, an austerity in communicative skills may occur despite their sufficient provision of academic knowledge.
Briefly, with its merit and demerit, I concur with the view that working and learning at home through computers will have double-edged impacts on residents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'facilitates'?
Suggestion: facilitates
...cause of two major reasons. Firstly, it facilitate citizens make the most of their time. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, while, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59202453988 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23928849451 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631901840491 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4539986653 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.214285714 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205958312711 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597638205397 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452506395321 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111142484651 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465278542651 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.